After some feedback, I decided to revisit and edit this scene: https://www.artstation.com/artwork/lV3O15
Samus and Shepard were rather stiff and boring, so I decided to change their poses, with Samus looking off to the side out the window and Shepard asleep.
NEW CHANGE:
Posed Lightning's eyes so she's looking out the window.
Also certain scenes were a little stretched due to the camera zoom, so I changed that.